Evolving My Undead Legion In A Game-Like World by _Drakon

What a fine poison. I tested it lads. It taste bitter and killing me slowly so I don't have enought time to share my thoughts but I will try

Although interesting concept it's so slow peaced that while being at ch.155 the story progressed something around a week in novel. God will forgive you author but I don't. Chapters and chapters of internal monolouges and info dumps with showing full stats and abilites description every two chapters (words count didn't add up? ). Heck even dialouges between characters needs few sentences of internal monolouge and sometimes half a chapter to see the reply of other person involved. Fights interrupted by the same thing was killing me internally.

It's truly absurd at some point because sometimes MC reply in theoretical way what he thinks what other person thinks or rather what he will think if he knew what other person thinks. I know you got a stroke from reading that but you know the gist how it feels to read that sometimes.

I was persistent bastard because I should leave it after chapter 50 but I clung to the thought "maybe it gets better later on" but I saw that author just like to write and write about meaningless things, showing stats, skill names and descriptions even tho he spent entire chapters explaining that. At some point I was just screaming "FFS just let people talk more". Maybe I am biased and people can enjoy such stuff but some things like novel structure or building the tension is important in events and here everything is interrupted by things mentioned above.

Interesting thing is that someone said that AI was involved in here and I can't say for sure but it's interesting trope. I saw author mentioning editor being involved in reviewing chapters so if two people was involved, read that and it still looks like the works of AI to some then I might agree or it's just author way of writing. It's just there is lots of sentences that have weird structure and even tho you get the sense it's like someone try to sound more professional by adding more words.

It's a shame because the concept and plot have some potential and that's why I kept reading that despite dying from all those monolouges. For now I leave it as warning to all fellow poison testers. I will keep reading and edit it if I find something interesting or it will be total flop. For now 4/10

Guys, it's not that bad; you can pass the time with it.

reading the synopis, it stated that only people between 16 and 18 get the special powers, and that alone is more dangeorus than any apocalypse.
stray far away from this mess explorer

Written by shitty ass ai....😂😂😂

Title: Evolving My Undead Legion In A Game-Like World
Verdict: A necromancer’s slow death by inner monologue.

There comes a point, dear reader, where “world-building” becomes “world-burying.”
I trudged through 200+ chapters of ruins, menus, and unending self-reflection....only to realize the true undead were not his summons, but the pacing itself.

The author loves thought more than progress. You can practically hear the neurons sizzling as the MC spends three chapters debating whether to check his own stats, another three on how his undead might perhaps, maybe, potentially evolve… and then doesn’t.
A philosopher trapped in a grindfest. A necromancer allergic to cultivation. A corpse with commitment issues.



The system dangles complexity like rotten meat.....ranks, awakeners, cultivators, monsters, all sharing the same names and none sharing logic. One might think the author is conducting a psychological experiment: “How long will the human spirit endure confusion before snapping?”

And still, I kept reading. Because buried in the mire lies potential..... the concept of evolving an undead legion has bones, fine bones. But the flesh? Overwritten. The blood? Diluted by exposition. The mind? Lost in the ruins by chapter 40.

I ranted, I cursed, I philosophized..... then I stopped at chapter 286. Not out of hate, but fatigue. Even the Dao cannot transcend endless status screens.

So if you, bold reader, wish to test your patience, go forth. Perhaps you’ll find enlightenment among the zombies of repetition. Or perhaps you’ll join me, lying under a heap of info-dumps, muttering,



—Daoist Inkdrunk Wanderer,
currently genderbent into a tired necromancer, evolving patience instead of undead.
drink poison, they said. It’ll make bad novels easier to digest, they said.
Still waiting for reincarnation… preferably into a story that moves past chapter four.

I have read until chapter ten, and I only have one thing to say about this.

As a professional poison tester and AI connoisseur, I can confidently say this is definitely made by ai with human editing or the other way round, honestly I am more inclined to believe the first case...

The author clearly sucks at proofreading his own works, considering this isn't even translated, here is a segment for you to see.

"On any other occasion, they might have, but today, there was no place for mockery, they all feared that they might fare any better than the student who had fallen."

Notice it?

'they all feared that they might fare any better than the student who had fallen.'

Might fare any better than the student who had fallen???

Serious?

That is pure broken english that completely makes no sense, I get what the author is trying to say, but using such language without actually checking leaves me at a headache, mind you this is just chapter one, the nine other chapters left with with the same stroke.

A accurate manner to have written this paragraph would have been:

"On any other occasion, they might have, but today, there was no place for mockery. Neither of them had confidence that they would fare any better than the student who had just fell."

Fallen just doesn't fit this?

Are they trying to use past tense? Future tense? Grammar is all over the place.

Moreover, the use of fare in this manner is already wrong.

By not changing anything and simply fixing his usage, the line should be "they all feared they might NOT fare any better"

His usage is essentially saying they are scared they will be better than her, when I am sure this is the writers intended usage.

This triggers me a lot as I am very sensitive to broken english (price of being a English major ig)

Anyways heed my word, and I swear upon the holy trinity when I say this, do not read for your sanity and mental health.

Gosh, I need a break now.

Looks garbage 🗑️ who gonna poison test this crime

This looks like your average fast food

I'm pretty sure it's bad. But here we go.

Poison tester?