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WE ARE BACK (ish)
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I've decided to do a rewrite.

Specifically for book 2.

After a long time stuck on one chapter, and seeing many comments complaining about the overall direction of the story after book 1, I realised that I sort of agree. I initially only really had the outline of the first arc thought out in my head, and a lot of people pointed out that that part of the story is by far the most interesting. I kind of stumbled into the dungeon mini arc by accident, though I'm happy how that turned out, so I'm not touching that either.

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Having no concrete idea of where I wanted to take the story when I started book 2 but still wanting to write something, the story kinda went nowhere. There wasn't really a goal or target, and the whole Luterra arc feels lacking at the moment. Plus a lot of people have rightfully pointed out that Alex being able to suck on monsters with no downsides removes a large point of interest from how he was gonna hide his monstrous side from the world, so that's gonna change too.

Anyway, I don't want to spoil the rewrite for you, so I'll shut up. I'm going to reupload the story and change some shit, and to find out what, you'll have to read it. I'm not done with the rewrite yet, but it should be up in a month or so at most. If anyone still remembers this story, and cares enough to continue reading, I hope you come over at that time, since you know I love you all (platonically).

Thanks for coming to my TED talk, and see you in a month.

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    Tech
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    Really enjoyed the first part so im looking forward to this.

    I don't know if you'll read this Kiwi but i ask you pay more attention to how you want Alex's magic progression. The magic styles introduced and your writing of them are very cool, but with no plan of action or focus on progression achieving them feels quite empty, and you'll put alot of burden on the rest of your story to make up for it.

    I think you've already got some idea of what to do anyway, but just don't skip over to when Alex has better control. Best if you establish HOW he pushes further into levels and why it's different to other people (if it even is).

    Also, hope you introduce a new character in book 2's rewrite. Part of the appeal is in interaction but nothing changed since book 1 last time, and those characters took a backseat which made that aspect of it feel empty. Would be nice to have another storyline in mind. I also would like internal struggles in this next part.

    Alex kinda was just doing things without thinking of anything. Add any meaning you want to any quest, but meaning is the goal. maybe give him an escort mission over some commonfolk? force him to watch them live their lives? He's already "accepted" his new life but i would like him to REAALLY realise what he can never have and feel something. f#ck that would be awesome

    Anyway, I believe in you kiwi, you've done great. i don't mean to berate just meant to say what i like to see more of. Looking forward to the rewrite!
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    Percival
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    This is one of the rare one that i enjoy reading so i will be waiting for sure
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    Novel Addict
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    Wohoo, cya soon Kiwi
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